Betrayal of Trust by B. B. Wright – Fiction/Adventure/Thriller
So what is it about?
Edward Slocum is the executive vice president of a pharmaceutic firm in Canada.
During a walk at their plant he’s very surprised to see men with machine guns. KemKor is up to something, something illegal. As his suspicions mount about his own employers, Edward finds himself on a roller-coaster ride of events that may change both his life and the community he lives and works in.
So B. B. Wright, tell us who you are?
First of all, I am a Canadian who lives in the province of Ontario.
With degrees in mathematics and education, I have worked in industry, business and education. I co-authored the first mathematics textbook series in Canada for Prentice-Hall.
I left teaching for a while to work as a real-estate appraiser; later returning to teach adults in a retraining program.
During that period, I co-authored “A Guide for Public Involvement” for industry through the Canadian Standards Association and assisted an environmental group “Future Builders,” in a consulting role. Before beginning my writing career, I studied under the tutelage of Canadian author Sandra Birdsell at Humber College’s School for Writers.
Here’s BB’s post:
Storytelling is my way of showing gratitude to the books and people who have shaped my life. The evolution of ideas and characters within the writing process is a relationship with ‘best friends.’ Never a job!
That relationship is a commitment, a responsibility and a promise to always do my best to get it right. When I tuck my characters in at the end of a day, I often linger for awhile—like best friends often do—before I turn off my computer.
I am more an organic writer (what some call a pantser) than a plotter. I have a general idea about how I want the novel to begin and end but, outside of that, that’s it. Let me give you a couple of examples of what I mean.
One of the characters in my book, Janet Thompson, was originally slated to be a minor character but I enjoyed her character so much against that of Charlotte Bradley and later Edward Slocum I was compelled to write her in—a decision I never regretted. Maybe you’ll understand from this excerpt: Most days—and today wasn’t one of them—60-year-old Janet Thompson didn’t look a day older than 50. She had a tendency to be plump, but she kept it in check by her vigorous lifestyle.
She preferred pants to skirts and boots, preferably work boots, to the conventional fashion that graced a woman’s foot. She liked hard liquor, preferably single-malt Irish whiskey, and she enjoyed poker with an occasional cigar. She never fit into the typical image of a teacher, but she liked that just fine, too—and so, as it turned out, did the community.
Within a chapter, I often throw ‘curve balls’ in order to see what may happen. In one particular chapter, while being pursued, both Charlotte and Janet were originally to cover a distance undetected in the dark. I decided to change it so that only one would arrive in the gully.
Here’s how it finally looked:
“There’s no time to waste, dearie. We’re heading there.” Janet pointed to the location she had chosen beside the egg factory. “Now!” Crouching low, they began running toward the egg facility. Janet felt something bite her neck, and she stumbled and fell. Dazed at first, she shook it off and recovering to her feet, began to run—but she knew her pace had slowed dramatically.
She felt groggy and her vision was blurred. She could barely see Charlotte ahead of her. The light ahead was blinding. There’s not supposed to be a light. My legs! She fell to the ground like a rag doll. Shit, it was a trap!
In the early stages, I was swimming in self-doubt. But, I have come to learn that doubt isn’t a bad thing. It keeps you honest to yourself, your art and your fans. Like the small child who first learns how to walk, writing begins one step at a time. Most important of all: NEVER QUIT!
Thanks BB for being our seventeenth guest post writer. I am always interested in conspiracy stories and how people fight back against corruption. I wish you well with your writing.
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Some things are off limits, even for the most challenged of us. Here is my list of the 7 things I shouldn’t ever be caught trying to tell you about in 2013:
1. A multi level marketing program. Sure, it sounds great to get a kick back every time someone clicks through to that How-to-Make-Your-Fortune-Without-Any-Effort site, but if the system worked so well, why would the sponsors need us to pay to join up?
2. Details about those amazing new photos I took of myself. If you wanted celebrity pics you wouldn’t be here, right?
3. Info on the clothes I just bought. They may fit snugly, but surely only my mother could care.
4. How I can AT LAST make money from Real Estate or FOREX trading. We all got suckered real good the last time, and the few people who didn’t get suckered are too smart to look on Twitter or a blog for investment advice. Only the truly innocent would fall for these.
5. An aphorism, spoonerism, myth or motto. Unless it was created by me, has been tested on my nearest and dearest, and has not made any of them laugh, in disgust.
6. Best wishes to enjoy our lives. My heart is in the right place, but there’s a lack of creativity in this. This is the one I fall down on!
7. Posts about anything negative. If I get the urge to do such a post I go to a dark room and lie down. After 15 minutes all such thoughts have gone and I’ll be thinking about a light snack and where the nearest toilets are.
Making an emotional connection with readers is critically important. If you don’t, they can easily stop reading. We are all familiar with emotions. They are what makes us have a great day or a bad one. But how does a writer use them to connect with readers?
One of the most basic emotions is desire. If your characters are motivated, if they have desire, if only for a glass of water, then readers will feel connected. And the more they want something, the more interesting your story becomes, as the reader is left wondering what the character will do to achieve their goal.
Desire is the basic emotion which keeps us involved in a story. If your main character wants something, you are obliged to put obstacles in their way too. Obstacles create conflict. Conflict will inspire an emotional response in your reader and keep them turning the pages.
Some other ways to build an emotion connection with the reader are:
* Creating embarrassment for a character. By making the reader feel that embarrassment you will build a connection with them.
* Having a character abused in some way. Natural sympathy will be evoked if you do something terrible to a character we have come to know.
* Placing opposing characters in the same situation. There’s a natural tension when opposing characters meet. Your readers will feel it if the opposing characters views have been shown to them.
* Fear creates tension in the reader too. If we know the murderer is coming up the stairs, and the woman is having a shower, we fear the outcome.
* Anticipation. If you foreshadow, occasionally, without explaining exactly what is going to happen, readers will anticipate something happening.
* Surprise readers. Readers will enjoy your writing if something surprising happens. They won’t have any idea what is going to happen next.
* Excitement is a powerful writing tool. You can move the plot fast, anticipate, and spell out what might happen, and then keep the reader waiting. All the above methods combined will produce excitement in your reader.
One of the hardest parts for a writer is in creating authentic emotional scenes.
The ability to understand how it feels to be in an emotional situation and to express that feeling in a genuine and new way, without resorting to cliche or to simply naming how characters feels, is vital to creating truly engaging writing.
People look for writing that truly explains how it feels to be in each situation. And they can tell if you haven’t represented the reality in a way that’s believable.
I wish you well with this, one of the hardest challenges of becoming a good writer in the 21st or any century.
This post is the sixth on a voyage exploring the world of getting your writing noticed.
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Here is a link to my previous post in this series on pace, keeping things moving.
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The reality of being published – 2 months after my first book came out all over the UK I wrote this post
The Accessible Author – how the author’s role is changing
Frantic Editing – a post on the editing process my first novel went through in the summer of 2011
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Yesterday I started the edits for The Jerusalem Puzzle.
I received two pages of notes from my editor at Harper Collins in London on Monday. Her comments included many compliments “powerful – expertly brought to life,” which are encouraging, but I won’t go on any more about, and suggestions for three extra scenes.
The first will be where Sean explains in detail why he wants to go to Jerusalem. The second will be where Henry’s involvement is expanded. The final one, at the end, will be where discussions take place about what happened in Jerusalem.
There are also notes from HC on each page of the manuscript, which need to be considered. This is all about 6 weeks work, editing maybe 2-3 hrs a day. After this we will have something truly interesting for you for January release.
Thank you for staying with me on this journey.
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The image below is of the Italian hardback edition of The Istanbul Puzzle, which is all over Italy at the moment. It was launched June 21st. If you know anyone in Italy please tell them it is available there. Thanks.
I am right in the middle of editing The Jerusalem Puzzle. At present Sean and Isabel are in Cairo and there’s a lot going on.
One of the challenges for a contemporary mystery writer, who writes about such places as Jerusalem and Cairo, is that so much is in flux in these cities. Sure, I follow Egyptian newspapers and Israeli newspapers, and I have linked to one of each for you, their English language versions, and I read books and articles (see my reading list here on Goodreads), but glimpsing where these countries might be in 12 to 24 months is a real challenge.
There are deep pressures at work, some of which I witnessed when I visited the Palestinian territories, the Negev and Jerusalem earlier this year.
Some of the other considerations I must keep in mind are the religious views of the people in these countries and the right wing shifts, the violence and the polarisation taking place in many European countries.
I see my role as a storyteller, someone who reports what happens to people caught up in a serious escalation in this area.
I see the good and the evil and the impact of forces almost beyond our control.
I hope you will enjoy Sean and Isabel’s story as it unfolds in Jerusalem and Cairo.
Please wish me luck in the next few weeks as I finish my final personal edit of The Jerusalem Puzzle. After that Harper Collins will conduct a deep edit and I will be back to the manuscript again in July to work on it.
I wish you all the best with whatever you are working on and thank you for following the story of The Jerusalem Puzzle as it unfolds.
Last Friday I finished draft one and two of The Jerusalem Puzzle. I call it one and two because I go back every day and edit what I wrote the previous day.
The Jerusalem Puzzle is written!
On Monday I started on the next edit. I plan to have it finished by mid May, when I will send it to Harper Collins.
I was pleased that both yesterday and the day before I was able to do my target of editing ten pages a day. This means, for me, that it’s fairly smooth already. That doesn’t mean to say that there won’t be changes and suggestions from Harper Collin’s editors, but it’s a lot smoother than The Istanbul Puzzle was at this stage.
I guess writing day after day, year after year is finally paying off.
As for the novel, I like it, if I’m allowed to say that. The main mysteries that were held over from The Istanbul Puzzle, what’s in that book they found, for instance, are solved in The Jerusalem Puzzle. Someone at the heart of the story dies too, but I can’t tell you any more about that.
It’s set mainly in Jerusalem, with some chapters in Cairo and the Judaean Hills. It’s about contemporary Israel too, with the very real threat of war hanging over the country, a threat that comes alive during the novel.
The Jerusalem Puzzle is due for release January 17, 2013. There may be an early chapter released at Christmas by Harper Collins.
I hope you enjoy it when it comes out. Next month, May, I will be sending an outline to the next in the series to Harper Collins. Once that is agreed I will tell you the title. We might also have the cover of The Jerusalem Puzzle to show you around then.
Thanks for all your feedback and support. I truly appreciate it.
Written February 2012
I am spending time in the old city of Jerusalem. If I stay here any longer I’ll probably have to apply for a resident’s permit. And as I am staying in East Jerusalem that may be tricky.
My reason for being here, aside from the welcome sun, is to research the next stage of Sean and Isabel’s adventures. If you read The Istanbul Puzzle you’ll probably know that there are a few questions at the end still hanging.
The Jerusalem Puzzle will move the story forward and answer some key questions.
As part of my research in old Jerusalem, where the book is mainly set, I have spent a lot of time in the Church of the Holy Sepulchre, the legendary site of Jesus’ crucifiction, his tomb and the burial place of Adam’s skull, according to some 2nd century sources. Whatever your beliefs, this place is an extraordinary building, a mix of mainly Crusader and 19th century, Armenian, Catholic and Orthodoxy all rolled into one. This was the place a lot of people died for before the crusades, during the crusades, and ever afterwards. Richard the Lion Heart and Saladin fought over this place and almost every other Empire since has had plans to capture it.
Here is what the entrance to the legendary tomb of Jesus looks like now (click each image to see it in all its glory):
This church is the most important place of pilgrimage in the Christian world. Bar none.
What I found though, at the end of my last visit, was a less than spiritual place. I had queued to get in to the small chapel where Jesus’ tomb is supposed to be with cries of “hurry, hurry, we are closing,” echoing in my ears. I’d visited where Mary, Mother of Jesus fell into an eternal sleep (legend says), on Mount Zion the day before and I was lucky that I went down into that underground tomb with the sound of a Polish group singing hymns echoing in my ears. That place was spiritual.
Much of the rest of the old city is a heady mix of the Arab souk, with plastic toys and wooden crosses for tourists, and a wedge of Abercrombie and coffee shop Westerness pushing up close to the city from the Jewish and modern western side.
To me Jerusalem is where three great faiths, Christianity, the Jewish faith and Islam all overlap with their bits fraying.
The Islamic faith is well represented here in the famous Golden Dome and mosques and the regular call to prayer filling the air.
The Jewish faith is evident in the devotion at the Western Wall, the Orthodox faithful almost everywhere, and through the joy of young men being escorted with drums and horns through the crowds.
The Christian faith is evident in the extraordinary churches and the pilgrims from all parts of the Christian world walking the Via Dolorosa carrying crosses and following the legendary route of Jesus to his death.
This city is an ancient fraying tapestry of faith and colour, tradition and prayer, belief and culture, the old and the modern mixed and interwoven.
I know there are many things in serious dispute here, but I hope to God compassion comes into play for a unique people and a unique place when this city’s future is decided.
The Jerusalem Puzzle, my next novel, will take readers to the heart of Jerusalem. It will expose some of the very real puzzles that are at the core of this truly amazing city. I hope you’ll like it as much as you liked The Istanbul Puzzle.