Chapter 1 The Manhattan Puzzle

Posted by on Sep 19, 2013 in Competitions, Mystery Novels, The Manhattan Puzzle

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The Manhattan Puzzle





‘Go for it. The rougher the better, girl.’ The man had a black silk blindfold tied around his head. He spoke slowly, his voice thick with desire.

Xena went to the door and unlocked it.

‘What’s that? Getting your toys out? Wow, this is even better than you promised.’

Lord Bidoner walked into the panic room. He closed the door behind him and pressed the button to turn on the air management system. The scrubber in the roof could remove the smoke from a blazing fire and turn the output into a vapour trail.

The man, spread-eagled and handcuffed to the stainless steel bed frame, had an expectant smile on his face.

‘Go on, do it,’ he said.

The navy Calvin Klein silk suit hanging from the stool beside the bed gave an indication of who he was. Lord Bidoner examined the man’s wallet. His bank ID card, a credit-card-sized piece of aluminium with an embedded prox­imity chip and his family name, Hare, embossed on it, confirmed what they already knew.

The head of global security at BXH, one of the world’s few truly global banks, was lying face-up and naked in front of him.

‘Don’t keep me waiting, girl.’

‘I won’t,’ purred Xena. She stroked his leg, then his inner thigh. He quivered in anticipation.

The man’s wife would surely appreciate photographs of this event, but Lord Bidoner had more pressing concerns.

He nodded at Xena.

She was dressed in a low-cut skin-tight black catsuit that fitted her thin frame perfectly. The man laid out in front of them was expecting something memorable from the woman he’d met in the champagne bar opposite Grand Central, two weeks before. Xena’s story, about being an Ethiopian diplomat’s daughter, and her eager smile, had captivated him.

She ran her finger down the man’s stomach. It trembled under her touch.

‘Don’t stop, honey. Don’t stop.’

With her other hand Xena clicked on the silver Turboflame blowtorch, the most expensive model in the world with its 1500C flame. She held the gently hissing blue, inch-long flame up and watched it glow brighter as her fingers moved slowly down his stomach.

‘What’s that?’ he said.

She didn’t reply.

Hare’s voice was still confident when he spoke. ‘Was that your sister who just came in? Is she gonna join us?’

‘We have a surprise for you,’ said Xena.

The man pulled on the handcuffs, which began to cut into his skin. It had taken a bit of persuasion, since this was their third meeting, for Xena to get him to go this far, but he trusted her now. And he’d made it clear that he wasn’t going to put up with any crap. He’d break the bed if she didn’t release him when he gave the password.

She’d smiled, hugged him and agreed.

They’d even laughed about making a written contract.

‘What’s the surprise?’ He shook the bed, testing its resilience and the strength of the handcuffs. He’d assumed they were easily breakable toys, like a previous pair she’d shown him. But he was wrong.

And he didn’t know that the bed was bolted to the reinforced slab of the panic room floor, either. Though he might have guessed that there was something wrong when it refused to move under him.

‘Just a friend of mine. We have a little question for you,’ said Xena.

‘Yeah?’ He was still curious, still expectant of further delights.

‘What is the password for the security system at BXH?’

The man didn’t reply verbally. He shook the bed from side to side, trying to break free. He didn’t know that his only hope was if his thrashing managed to separate his hands from his wrists, and his feet from his ankles. And very few people have strength enough to do that.

Xena waved the blue flame, raised it, as if offering it up. It flickered higher.

The odour of the burning butane gas filled the room like bad perfume. The sound of the blow torch was a threatening hissing now. Xena placed the tip of the flame against the top edge of the whiskey tumbler the man had been drinking from. The glass turned blue.

‘Wait until you feel this. Then you will tell me,’ said Xena. Her tone had changed. It was demanding now.

‘What? Fu . . .’ The end of that confident word was bitten off by the piercing scream that came from deep within his throat. Xena had touched the flame against the pale skin of his shoulder.

He began thrashing. Like a fish flailing. He moved from side to side, squirming away from the skin-blistering heat. But he couldn’t move fast enough. And his legs and arms were stretched out tight.

Easy targets.

The smell in the room changed and the atmosphere with it. Pain and whimpering, sizzling and guttural roars filled the air.

The man had become a dog.

Then Xena asked him again.

‘The password, please.’ She spoke softly, as if they were still playing a game.

‘If you give it up, I will release you. You can explain these little burns to your wife. But the ones I will inflict next will require hospital treatment. Or the services of a morgue.’ She clicked the flame off, then pressed the hot tip hard and fast into the biggest blister she had inflicted, near his ankle.

‘What do you say, Mr Hare?’

The man answered with a defiant, animal roar. He shook the bed under him. The last vestige of his pride in working at BXH bellowed out of him.

Xena lit the flame again. She reached forward, touched it to his chest, and ran it fast down the middle until smoke from his burning body hair filled the room with a sickly odour.

‘Stop, stop!’ he screamed. His body squirmed to escape the heat.

‘It’s #89*99,’ he shouted. ‘Please! Stop!’

Bidoner keyed the password into his phone and pressed send.

‘I hope you’re not lying,’ said Xena. ‘I want all this to have a happy ending.’

She squeezed his thigh with her hand, then stroked it.

Tears streamed from under his blindfold. His cheeks were red. It was good he couldn’t see the weals on his body, because he would know immediately that he wouldn’t be able to explain any of them to his wife.

‘Please, let me go. I promise not to tell anyone. I swear, on my children’s lives.’

Lord Bidoner’s mobile beeped as an incoming message came in. He nodded at Xena. The code had worked.

‘I believe you,’ she said. ‘But there is one more thing I must do for you.’

She put the Turboflame down and went to the fridge. She took out a six-inch-long serrated knife, honed with care to a perfect blade, from the freezer section.

She held it in the air, admiring its cold edge.

‘Now you will find release,’ she said.

The man’s body went still. His toes, which had scrunched up, half straightened. The only sound was his pain-filled whimpering.

The panic room in the apartment on Fifth Avenue, over­looking the skyscrapers of Manhattan, was soundproof. It was why they used the room.

Xena flicked the blade across the man’s pale skin, once, then twice, fascinated by how quickly blood gushed, how fast it flowed from a few simple cuts.

‘This is for my brothers,’ she said.

‘Don’t,’ he whimpered. Fear trembled in his voice. ‘I have two children, a wife.’

She growled, psyching herself up.

Prima quattuor invocare unum,’ she said, as she grabbed him, jerking him upwards and castrating him with one swinging motion.

She held the bloody remains up in the air.

His screams of terror and pain vibrated through the room as blood spurted two feet high. A foul smell followed and the man’s words became a babbling.

Lord Bidoner held his nose. He’d seen enough. He went out to the main room of the apartment, with its view towards the glittering Jazz-era spire of the Empire State Building.

‘You did good, my dear. The first offering has been done correctly,’ he said, when Xena joined him.

She was panting.

‘Come here.’

He pushed her up against the inch-thick glass of the window, as Manhattan glittered behind them.

Afterwards, he handed her a balloon glass containing a large shot of Asbach 21. She sipped the brandy, then downed it in one gulp.

Then she lay down on the sleek oak coffee table that dominated the room. The canyon of lights stretching into the velvet Manhattan night reflected all the way along the length of the table and onto her ebony skin.

He reached down and stroked her shoulder. It was trem­bling.

‘Three more before the moon rises again. That is what the book says. That is what we will do.’

She smiled up at him. Her white teeth shone as she leaned her head back and stretched.

The Manhattan Puzzle_(C) LP O’Bryan & Harper Collins

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  1. I’ve just bought this after reading the blurb, then I read the first chapter! OMG I live a book with a powerful beginning & this has the makings of a fantastic book.

  2. Wow! I can’t wait to read what happens next!

  3. Hmm, i’m not sure about this; I prefer my novels to be more subtle … This feels like a hybrid of Dan Brown and Stieg Larsson, whereas I gravitate more naturally towards Peter May.

  4. Page turner!

  5. Hot! What a beginning! Grabbed me from the 1st sentence, and I can’t wait to read the rest of your novel! I want to know if he deserved that… 😉 Pre-ordered it already!

  6. It sounds good, but will it be too gorey. I will buy it to find out!

  7. This looks interesting cant wait to get a chance to pick it up :)

  8. Chop chop fizz fizz oh what a relief it is.

  9. Having read the first 2, I am looking forward to the 3rd and have it pre-ordered

  10. wow wow wow and Wow.
    you my friend are very talented.

  11. Hooked me straight away. Looking forward to reading the rest. Gripping.

  12. The first chapter is gripping and I am hooked! I can’t wait to get this book and read more to see what happens! If you love the Dan Brown books… will love this series! O’Brian is the next big thing!

  13. OMG I want to know what happens now I will have to have a look at this book its gripped me right from the beginning!

  14. Seems like it would be a good buy, glad I came across this. :-)

  15. Wow my kind of book and just as I am looking for a new series to read. I now can’t wait!!

  16. This was my first reading of your work. I see money leaving my pockets. Fascinating.

  17. Well, I’m not gonna say I hate it, but this isn’t my cup of tea-lol. It is very well written and as others have said, fast-paced. I’m more of a supernatural/romance fan. Don’t like torture and evil serial killers. But, I would love a Kindle Fire! I don’t have one.

  18. I am looking forward to this book and if the first chapter is anything to go by then it will be a gripping read!

  19. Nicely done. Quick pace, peaked curiosity. Well done,

  20. Wow, feel sick, but in a good way. Looking forward to release date!

    Have been R/T ing too!

  21. Wow! I have all 3 on my wishlist, have a big birthdy coming up in the next few weeks

  22. Great, scary stuff to get us males squirming. Better for me to say Xena could have cut his inflated bonus then suspended him by his unsecured derivatives until he defaulted?

  23. An amendment: I should have said cut his inflated bonus.

  24. You’re such a pussy, Laurence. Crank up the suffering! Why not have Xena have him lose his deposit, cut his bonus, then hang him from his derivatives until they became unsecured and he defaulted?

    • Congratulationyou are the WINNER! Either a Kindle (basic model – better IMO as no internet!) or Amazon vouchers to the value. Email me to claim your prize!

  25. Wow, what an opener. I can’t wait to read more of this. I’ to pre-order it now. Thanks for the excerpt :-)

  26. Wow what a gripping book! This will be a sensation well done.

  27. Wow! I’m speechless… And wanting to read more.

  28. Gripping opener, makes me want to know more !

  29. If this is any indication of how the rest of the book is going to be, you’re on your way to the New York Times bestseller list! Loving it!

  30. Awsome. I wanna read it so badly

  31. Wow!!!! The suspense! If the first chapter starts like this, then I can’t wait to read the rest!

  32. pre-ordered this book. Hope it is as good as it looks. thanks for sending the heads up about it. It looks awesome.

  33. Will definately buy it as I’m loving the Jerusalem Puzzle

  34. Yikes! What a start to a book! Now you have to know what happens next! People buy it to find out! Thanks for the chance!

  35. Great. :) Can’t wait for the rest of it.. Thanks :)

  36. Amazing first chapter – I may have some serious nightmares from that!

  37. Looks like a great book, will add to my wishlist (birthday soon!) & a great competition too :)

  38. The sexual tension throughout this extract is gripping, broken only by shivers of horror. This is on my to-buy list.

  39. Sounds like an interesting read. I’ll have to read it when it comes out!

  40. What a teaser for the rest….

  41. What a teaser for the rest…..

  42. There are so many real life people who should be tied to that bed in the panic room, LOL! Can’t wait for the next chapter.

  43. A very engagng read. Can’t wait to see the rest.

  44. It sounds like a very intriging book. I am anxiously waiting, like the rest.

  45. Can’t wait to read it ^^

  46. Wow, another book to add to my list, can’t wait to read it!

  47. Will definitely add this to my Must Read Soon pile

  48. Brilliant. Cannot wait to read the rest.

  49. Intriguing. Pre-ordered.

  50. Pre-ordered my copy today. Can’t wait to read the rest of it!

  51. Powerful stuff – I was wincing all the way

  52. Pre ordered
    Loved the first chapter
    Thank you

  53. Bought it and waiting.

  54. I have just pre-ordered and really look forward to chapter 2 and beyond!

  55. Pre-ordered and very excited!! Brilliant way of doing a competition!

  56. Very sensually vibrating in suspense and captivating to all the senses and feeling of extreme meaning and depth……..

  57. I have pre-ordered The Manhattan Puzzle. Very excited!

  58. Preordered a while ago. Looking forward to the third.

  59. I have pre-ordered myself a copy and I’m very excited to receive the book. Loved the excerpt, very entertained by the characters and I’m eager to read the whole story. Lawrence O’Bryan is one of my favourite authors to date and his thrillers keep me engrossed for hours on end, whether it be my first reading or a re-reading :). Additionally, thank you for the opportunity to win a Kindle. It would be lovely to win as I travel a lot on trains and this would be the perfect accessory to help me keep up to date with my reading! :-)
    Selena G

  60. Yes! Have perordered print + ebook. Can’t wait! Have a Kindle though, so pick another to win.

  61. I pre-ordered it on 6th May. The wait seems endless!

  62. Magnetic…

  63. Already pre-ordered, can’t wait. Mr. Laurence O’Bryan writes with intellectual ease, allowing the reader to travel having the promise of being entertained with every page, and the Amazon Kindle Fire is my preferred vehicle. Love them both. :)

  64. Pre-ordered ages ago :-)
    …and yesterday I bumped into my first random Istanbul Puzzle reader (as opposed to the many to whom I have raved about the book). What a great way to meet someone…”I’ve just finished a book called Istanbul Puzzle” says she, “What did you think” I replied. Several coffees later I have a new friend :-)

  65. It is gripping. It riveting and and breathtakingly fast paced. This is my idea of a mouth waterin tale. Give me some more.

  66. Couldn’t miss out on number 3. Looking forward to reading The Manhattan Puzzle I have just pre-ordered

  67. Wow, what a start – can’t wait to read the rest. It’s on pre-order

  68. Ouch!! I read this with my jaw clenched, my eyes squinting and well, my legs crossed! You’re good, my friend. You’re good.

  69. Oh I’ve ordered it alright….months ago..Now I’m counting the days on the Calendar like as (//) portrayed in older films featuring prisons, jails gangsters & in some cases “Good Guys” jailed in the wrong. :-)

  70. Been on preorder since it became available! It’s getting close now, lucky I have a week off booked ready :)

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